Wednesday, April 14, 2010

Undying Love...

I am not good with fiction. But I liked the concept of 77 fiction. So here's my first attempt...

It was his birthday. She was going to meet him…

Dressed in the best gown, she looked beautiful. Excited, she left home with her charming smile.

She reached there to find complete silence. She could even hear her heart beat!
She moved ahead and touched his grave. She could still feel him. She moved ahead, kept the beautiful flowers she had brought for him and kissed his grave. With tears in her eyes and a promise to come back, she left...

11 comments:

Vinz said...

Gud attempt..!!

:)

rohini said...

wow,,,,so touchy......grt job surbhi!!!

D2 said...

Love the sentiments.
Sad, though.

Savira Gupta said...

A sad beginning! Waiting......

payal kalra said...

oi! liked totally!

Cinderella said...

I's day this is a good attempt Surbhi!

I read almost all your post in this page and you are good! Loved your piece on 'Death to God'. Very thought provoking. Good work.

Gonna be back. And hey thanks for dropping by!

DISGRUNTLED GENIUS said...

The pain of a desire that cant be fulfilled.. yet makes you smile.. nice post Surbhi :)

Vintage Obsession said...

i lost my dog recently which was like a family member , this post bought back memories of the day we buried her

Anyways i want to read ahead and see where this post heads :) will be back:)

Surbhi Jain said...

@Vinz @rohini @D2 @Payal @Mayank Thanks :)

@YogaSavy I will come up with something bright and cheerful soon :)

@Cindrella Thanks.... I would love to see you around!

@smrithi awww... I didn't mean to hurt you! But I understand... It always feels bad to loose someone you are really close to!

Adam said...

Stumbled on ur blog.. nice post.. like everyone else,I'd like a sunnier post too.. :) Keep blogging!

Mahesh Aadhya Kalal said...

I missed it...
Hmmm....blame it on my blogger widget i didnt get ur updates since weeks...
Anyway, gud starter buddy, the concept is gripping.... It could have been better ....i mean the twist/shock/suspense/U turn strikes well if it comes in the last line/last word...

Waiting for ur second 77er :) :) :)
keep expressing

cheers
mahesh kalaal :)